hold, control, hold
it starts when they tell you"your child is broken"first you deny the cracksthen you hide in them,escape their blame-eyed glaresfrom the produce aisle where his illnessseeps through the cartleaving...
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James, thank you for your thoughtful synopsis and your kind, non-judgmental comments. I am glad the piece moved you..
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Wonderful, tender poem, Jennifer.I love these lines and images:"your child is brokenfirst you deny the cracksthen you hide in them""we sit kama sutra styleon his bachelor bedlike the pornographic king...
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thanks Kerri, it is good to be writing again, and to be here again, I am reading and enjoying the poems here, will try to comment too! I appreciate your taking the time....Jennifer
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i signed in just to tell you that this poem is glorious, jenny.
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wonderful poem. the subtle emotions and complex situations are well-handled, perfectly drawn. love this poem. regardsedenNavel Orange
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we sit kama sutra styleon his bachelor bedlike a pornographic king and queen ..'I found on the streets of philadelphia'messed up the flow for me.and really the piece wouldn't be destroyed without that...
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Thanks Patrick! Stick around And you are right, James, besides, my lilies love to be gilded Thanks Eden and Tasha, for the suggestion! I will look it over, thanks for reading
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I agree. I love these lines too:"your child is brokenfirst you deny the cracksthen you hide in them"
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Hi Jennifer,I agree with the rest, this is exceptionally strong writing and presents itself with a raw and vital clarity that keeps the reader engaged and very empathetic toward the speaker's...
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jesus, Jennifer, you nailed every damn thing in here that makes sense and doesnt make sense about motherhood and sex and control and sanity and day to day insanity and the whole mess of it. A million...
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i don't even have the words (if there are any) to tell you how good this piece is.
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I apologize for dropping this poem in here and then disappearing before I got to thank you for your wonderful comments, very humbling.... y'all make me want to write again (kind of) Writing is hard,...
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I always love reading your work, Jen.re this:"Writing is hard, isn't it? Yep. (smile)much affection, kerri
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hi jennifer,writing is difficultamen.I do agree with tasha, but overall outside of what she mentions your voice is polished and the poem is amazing.I think most all of your poems are.Writing may be...
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